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WRITER IN MOTION => Week 2 posts => Topic started by: Steph Whitaker on November 14, 2019, 03:04:22 PM

Title: Draft 2 : Shadow Heart by Stephanie Whitaker
Post by: Steph Whitaker on November 14, 2019, 03:04:22 PM

Here is a link to my 2nd draft blog post! :taco:
https://stephwhitaker80.wixsite.com/swhitakerwrites/post/writerinmotion-2nd-draft---the-self-edited-version

Title: Re: Draft 2 : Shadow Heart by Stephanie Whitaker
Post by: Fabierien on November 17, 2019, 01:52:30 PM

Parts of that had me knots. Her love for her sister was just so palatable, so real. The beauty of the wedding matched with the horror of the slaughter was both wonderful and horrible.

I was confused by the ending, was the soldier saying 'come get some' or did he feel ashamed for what he was doing (butchering a wedding)? Was he setting a trap for soldiers that would arrive or was he setting his own people to be butchered. So many questions.

Title: Re: Draft 2 : Shadow Heart by Stephanie Whitaker
Post by: Thuy on November 18, 2019, 04:43:04 AM

Wow, what a ride through a spectrum of feelings, all in under 1000 words! You have such a great gift for storytelling. I love the vivid imagery in this piece and the bigger story it hints at. And the Breaker. I have so many questions too!