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WRITER IN MOTION => Week 3 posts => Topic started by: jlburrowsauthor on November 21, 2019, 05:00:37 PM

Title: For Serenity - 3 Critique Partners Draft
Post by: jlburrowsauthor on November 21, 2019, 05:00:37 PM

I LOVE the critique partner round! The more that I work with CPs the less I believe anyone should ever put words out in the world without at least two CPs touching it.

This round was so easy for me! I was emotionally attached to two parts, but I slashed them, trusting my CPs. I LOVE THIS VERSION! It's only problem is that it is 126 words too long. So, this next week I'm working with my CP to pare it down. Fingers crossed!

You can read it on my blog at https://www.jlburrows.com/2019/11/21/for-serenity-2/

To those of you that left me a comment on my last draft, YOU MADE MY WEEK! Thank you so much! I always love those!
Jennifer

Title: Re: For Serenity - 3 Critique Partners Draft
Post by: Grim Dreamer on November 21, 2019, 06:45:48 PM

Good job!

Title: Re: For Serenity - 3 Critique Partners Draft
Post by: songmaiden on November 23, 2019, 11:01:37 PM

Wow! I loved this?what wouldn?t we do for our children? This line, though: ?She was uninjured and bleeding to death.? MY HEART. Loved it.

Title: Re: For Serenity - 3 Critique Partners Draft
Post by: jlburrowsauthor on November 30, 2019, 08:24:52 PM

Thank you both for your encouragement!

Jennifer