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WRITER IN MOTION => Week 3 posts => Topic started by: Steph Whitaker on November 22, 2019, 01:11:26 PM

Title: 3rd Draft / CP Edits
Post by: Steph Whitaker on November 22, 2019, 01:11:26 PM

Here it is! My 3rd draft, CP feedback, edited short story.  :heart: :taco:

https://stephwhitaker80.wixsite.com/swhitakerwrites/post/writerinmotion-3rd-draft---critique-partners

Title: Re: 3rd Draft / CP Edits
Post by: Thuy on November 22, 2019, 04:23:27 PM

Excellent thoughts on the importance of having critique partners and thanks for sharing your process! I enjoyed this story before, but I really really love it even better now! This is definitely my favorite draft. I loved how you fleshed things out in this version, explaining why she has to marry Galen to stay with her sister, and putting her fear of heights into play at the climax. Zia's arc is much more apparent and compelling here. Do I even have to say it? HELL YES to the full-length novel!

Title: Re: 3rd Draft / CP Edits
Post by: Grim Dreamer on November 22, 2019, 04:39:36 PM

Nice! Very clear motivations.

Title: Re: 3rd Draft / CP Edits
Post by: Steph Whitaker on November 22, 2019, 06:21:10 PM

Thank you! :heart: :heart: :heart: :taco:

Title: Re: 3rd Draft / CP Edits
Post by: songmaiden on November 23, 2019, 02:56:40 PM

I loved this, especially the change halfway through from her wanting to marry Galen to stay with her sister, to that reality being ripped from her in one fell swoop. And the end! I loved the end?I?d love a glimpse at her life three years from now. :)

Title: Re: 3rd Draft / CP Edits
Post by: Fabierien on November 24, 2019, 01:12:49 AM

Novel: Please, I must read this. Such a good set up, so interested in the future of what happens. Such a compelling story. Well done.