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WRITER IN MOTION => Week 1 posts => Topic started by: HM Braverman on August 08, 2020, 02:11:29 PM

Title: The Way-Station (First Draft)
Post by: HM Braverman on August 08, 2020, 02:11:29 PM

https://hmbraverman.com/2020/08/05/writer-in-motion-2020-the-first-draft/

Here?s my first draft. I appreciate any feedback you all have.  :heart:

Title: Re: The Way-Station (First Draft)
Post by: SKaeth on August 08, 2020, 02:46:25 PM

I loved this. You really had me worried there with the sniper and the baby!

Title: Re: The Way-Station (First Draft)
Post by: AnthonyEden on August 08, 2020, 04:43:03 PM

PLOT TWIST! :D I love it!

Title: Re: The Way-Station (First Draft)
Post by: Erin Fulmer on August 08, 2020, 05:10:18 PM

Oooh great twist! I was upset that you wanted me to identify with an assassin targeting a pregnant woman...and then you turned my assumptions upside down. Well done!

Title: Re: The Way-Station (First Draft)
Post by: Thuy on August 08, 2020, 06:53:24 PM

This multi-POV story was AWESOME! I love how you depict such a varied range of characters and emotions, all "moving" in the story at the same time