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WRITER IN MOTION => Week 1 posts => Topic started by: ShaynaGrissom on August 03, 2020, 02:37:30 AM

Title: Woman in the Shack (1st Draft)
Post by: ShaynaGrissom on August 03, 2020, 02:37:30 AM

https://shaynamightbeanauthor.blogspot.com/2020/08/writer-in-motion-short-story-woman-in.html

Title: Re: Woman in the Shack (1st Draft)
Post by: BErixson on August 03, 2020, 04:36:03 PM

Oh wow. I like how voicey the opening is... and was not expecting that ending.

Title: Re: Woman in the Shack (1st Draft)
Post by: Helena on August 04, 2020, 07:27:39 AM

Lots of twists in this story. You don't know where it's going until you get to the brutal ending which totally caught me off guard.

Title: Re: Woman in the Shack (1st Draft)
Post by: Vickywrites on August 04, 2020, 07:24:43 PM

Wow, that ending packed a punch! I knew something was coming from the great build up, but wasnt expecting that!

Title: Re: Woman in the Shack (1st Draft)
Post by: SKaeth on August 06, 2020, 01:51:46 AM

What a powerful evocative end! I really did not expect that and now I have so many questions! Really well done first draft!

Title: Re: Woman in the Shack (1st Draft)
Post by: dankoboldt on August 06, 2020, 01:57:49 PM

The opening felt so deeply personal and real. You showed us the tip of so many backstory icebergs. There was, admittedly, a moment where I thought the lady in the shack was the mom, because they'd just been talking about her. Obviously I figured it out when they called her hot :-).

Wow, that ending! My mouth literally fell open.

Title: Re: Woman in the Shack (1st Draft)
Post by: Erin Fulmer on August 07, 2020, 06:00:35 PM

I realized I read this and even linked to it in my blog, but missed commenting on it! I love the dark creepiness here and the reveal/twist. I'm curious what happens with the character's brother at the end. Can't wait to see it develop!