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WRITER IN MOTION => Week 1 posts => Topic started by: Antoinette_TheCreator on August 04, 2020, 11:26:45 PM

Title: Ethereal Child ( First Draft )
Post by: Antoinette_TheCreator on August 04, 2020, 11:26:45 PM
Below is the google doc link to the first draft of my short story Ethereal Child for the Writer in Motion prompt. I really enjoyed writing this while also drawing inspiration from the prompt image, its a bit more than 1K words but I really got into a flow while writing. ( Pantsed )

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1T6qSzDPp0YYFhVj3KVDDQ59FNmVYTeMFhexfnsEqrPA/edit?usp=sharing
Title: Re: Ethereal Child ( First Draft )
Post by: SKaeth on August 06, 2020, 03:13:39 PM
Oh excellent first draft! I love the twist at the end-- very powerful emotions there! Looking forward to seeing what this becomes!
Title: Re: Ethereal Child ( First Draft )
Post by: Erin Fulmer on August 07, 2020, 06:12:40 PM
Wow! Gorgeous and lyrical use of language, powerful descriptions, and you've fleshed out what feels like a fully realized fantasy world in a small amount of words. I think the voice is very strong here. I really enjoyed this one and I can't wait to see how it develops.
Title: Re: Ethereal Child ( First Draft )
Post by: K. J. Harrowick on August 08, 2020, 02:33:52 PM
Oh goodness, this is so gorgeous I want to cry. I absolutely love the voice and mood you've woven into this, and the twist at the end is just perfect.

I definitely want to read all the things in this world.  :heart:
Title: Re: Ethereal Child ( First Draft )
Post by: AnthonyEden on August 08, 2020, 04:52:46 PM
Imagine me doing a silly dance in front of my computer. Yeah. This is amazing! Such a deep and richly textured world you've painted with your words.

Gimme mooooore!
Title: Re: Ethereal Child ( First Draft )
Post by: Antoinette_TheCreator on August 08, 2020, 10:04:05 PM
Quote from: AnthonyEden on August 08, 2020, 04:52:46 PM
Imagine me doing a silly dance in front of my computer. Yeah. This is amazing! Such a deep and richly textured world you've painted with your words.

Gimme mooooore!

Im thrilled that you enjoyed it so much, thank you for the kind feedback. This is a short story to my high fantasy series Kisodoh so there is definitely more to come I can tell you that much.
Title: Re: Ethereal Child ( First Draft )
Post by: Antoinette_TheCreator on August 08, 2020, 10:06:43 PM
Quote from: K. J. Harrowick on August 08, 2020, 02:33:52 PM
Oh goodness, this is so gorgeous I want to cry. I absolutely love the voice and mood you've woven into this, and the twist at the end is just perfect.

I definitely want to read all the things in this world.  :heart:

Its an honor to inspire such emotions into readers! Thank you, once I complete my series you will be hearing a lot more of Sinnilah.
Title: Re: Ethereal Child ( First Draft )
Post by: Antoinette_TheCreator on August 08, 2020, 10:08:05 PM
Quote from: Erin Fulmer on August 07, 2020, 06:12:40 PM
Wow! Gorgeous and lyrical use of language, powerful descriptions, and you've fleshed out what feels like a fully realized fantasy world in a small amount of words. I think the voice is very strong here. I really enjoyed this one and I can't wait to see how it develops.

Yes Im curious to see how it will turn out as well, all part of the WIM journey and I love it :heart: