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WRITER IN MOTION => Week 1 posts => Topic started by: dankoboldt on August 06, 2020, 01:13:46 PM

Title: First Draft: The Watcher in the Vale
Post by: dankoboldt on August 06, 2020, 01:13:46 PM

Hello, WIM friends! I've completed my first draft of a science fiction story I'm calling "The Watcher in the Vale" and posted it on my blog here:

http://dankoboldt.com/wim-week-1-first-draft/ (http://dankoboldt.com/wim-week-1-first-draft/)

Title: Re: First Draft: The Watcher in the Vale
Post by: Helena on August 06, 2020, 05:46:59 PM

Astonishingly well written. Amazing what you were able to do with so few words and how your story covered every element.

Title: Re: First Draft: The Watcher in the Vale
Post by: SKaeth on August 07, 2020, 03:23:40 PM

As I said in my tweet, this is a great first draft! I love how you mashed up SF and F and could lean either way or continue to keep them mixed! Looking forward to seeing how it changes through edits!

Title: Re: First Draft: The Watcher in the Vale
Post by: Vickywrites on August 07, 2020, 03:59:11 PM

A great premise and so well-written! I look forward to seeing how it develops!

Title: Re: First Draft: The Watcher in the Vale
Post by: erikafrose on August 07, 2020, 04:28:02 PM

Nicely done.  :)

Title: Re: First Draft: The Watcher in the Vale
Post by: K. J. Harrowick on August 07, 2020, 06:23:19 PM

Absolutely gorgeous work, Dan. I was riveted from the opening line all the way to the end.

You moved the story along brilliantly and the end was such a satisfying arc, and yet I'm dying to know more about this man, this universe, and why that object exists in the first place.  :heart: