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WRITER IN MOTION => Week 1 posts => Topic started by: Jeffrey Ricker on August 08, 2020, 11:47:34 PM

Title: First Draft: Exile
Post by: Jeffrey Ricker on August 08, 2020, 11:47:34 PM

Whew! I signed up late and didn't get started writing until Thursday, so this is a) very rough and b) very much over length and c) very late. But, it's done.

https://jeffrey-ricker.com/writer-in-motion-week-1-exile/ (https://jeffrey-ricker.com/writer-in-motion-week-1-exile/)

Now I can't wait to check out other folks' work.

Title: Re: First Draft: Exile
Post by: SKaeth on August 09, 2020, 04:15:00 PM

This was great! I love how you wove in their past into the events, and I'm interested to see what you choose to cut!

Title: Re: First Draft: Exile
Post by: Jeffrey Ricker on August 09, 2020, 09:01:56 PM

Quote from: SKaeth on August 09, 2020, 04:15:00 PM

This was great! I love how you wove in their past into the events, and I'm interested to see what you choose to cut!

Thanks! That's the tricky part.  :-\ However, it helps that I almost always over-write and can tighten things up a lot. So glad you enjoyed it!

Title: Re: First Draft: Exile
Post by: K. J. Harrowick on August 13, 2020, 02:08:55 PM

Love this! B definitely makes me think of Johnny 5.  ;D

Title: Re: First Draft: Exile
Post by: Erin Fulmer on August 14, 2020, 02:56:48 AM

I enjoyed this so much. Great characters and conflict with a really interesting backstory. Love the caretaking bot. Glad you're joining us!