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WRITER IN MOTION => Week 1 posts => Topic started by: Kristin Record on November 07, 2019, 08:20:38 PM

Title: The Drowning Game - First Draft
Post by: Kristin Record on November 07, 2019, 08:20:38 PM

The Drowning Game by Kristin Record

You can find my first draft here : https://wickedrambling.wordpress.com/2019/11/07/writer-in-motion-week-1-first-draft-the-drowning-game/ (https://wickedrambling.wordpress.com/2019/11/07/writer-in-motion-week-1-first-draft-the-drowning-game/)

Title: Re: The Drowning Game - First Draft
Post by: Grim Dreamer on November 07, 2019, 10:09:13 PM

Nice first draft! Clear problem, difficult solution, and good external tension.

Title: Re: The Drowning Game - First Draft
Post by: Jeni Chappelle on November 10, 2019, 03:42:51 AM

I wanna read it but don't want to get an pre-conceived ideas before I edit it.  :'(

Title: Re: The Drowning Game - First Draft
Post by: Thuy on November 10, 2019, 08:21:02 PM

What a beautiful and emotional piece! The inspiration from your own personal grief shows in your lovely writing, and the ending gave me all the feels :heart:

Title: Re: The Drowning Game - First Draft
Post by: KristenH on November 11, 2019, 12:00:35 AM

Wicked, what a great first draft to capture a party scene with family. Thanks for sharing this memorable piece  in honor of your loss.

Title: Re: The Drowning Game - First Draft
Post by: SKaeth on November 12, 2019, 02:30:10 AM

So sorry for your loss. This piece is so powerful, crashing with emotion. It's a really nice draft!