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WRITER IN MOTION => Week 1 posts => Topic started by: K. J. Harrowick on November 09, 2019, 04:57:22 PM

Title: THE CLOCKS INSIDE - Ye Olde Firste Draft
Post by: K. J. Harrowick on November 09, 2019, 04:57:22 PM
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               The Clocks Inside - Ye Olde Firste Draft
I knew in my heart that Henry hadn't cheated, but each time I saw his face, all I could see was Constance throwing her lips against his. I'd never been a jealous woman, but Henry and I belonged to each other.

I set my suitcase down on the doorstep, rusted iron wrought in elegant designs over the old oak door. Numbers burned into the wood changed with the second, the hour, it was the only clock in the universe that kept true time.

A knock on the door wasn't necessary. As soon as my knuckles hovered against the weathered wood, grandfather opened. He never called unless something horrible happened, and he never called mother. Only me, because I never had to forgive him. But his daughter--my mother--was another story.
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Title: Re: THE CLOCKS INSIDE - Ye Olde Firste Draft
Post by: KristenH on November 09, 2019, 11:51:20 PM
KJ, you've killed it in this story story told in 500 words or less. Nice job!
Title: Re: THE CLOCKS INSIDE - Ye Olde Firste Draft
Post by: Jeni Chappelle on November 10, 2019, 03:33:10 AM
OMG! This has a totally different feel than your other stories I've read. I love it, and I love that you included an alternate ending!
Title: Re: THE CLOCKS INSIDE - Ye Olde Firste Draft
Post by: K. J. Harrowick on November 11, 2019, 04:01:40 AM
Thank you, Thuy for finding my broken link!  :'(

So sorry to Jeni and Kristen . . . here's the real link: https://www.blog.halon-chronicles.com/writer-in-motion-first-draft-the-clocks-inside/

Above 'read more' link is fixed.
Title: Re: THE CLOCKS INSIDE - Ye Olde Firste Draft
Post by: Thuy on November 11, 2019, 04:22:22 AM
The premise of a library filled with globe worlds is so friggin awesome!! Loved the atmosphere and shadowy feel of this tale. I can't even decide which ending I like better. Also, D. Ragon Hyde got me all  :D
Title: Re: THE CLOCKS INSIDE - Ye Olde Firste Draft
Post by: Fariha Khayyam on November 14, 2019, 04:03:19 PM
 i love this so much!!
Title: Re: THE CLOCKS INSIDE - Ye Olde Firste Draft
Post by: songmaiden on November 15, 2019, 02:30:41 AM
I loved this--I already love your globe worlds, but I reaaaally loved that this included the globes, even though it begins in such a different place. I love the noir feel of it, and I want to know what Henry has been up to LOL.