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K. J. Harrowick

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Critique Partner Magic - THE CLOCKS INSIDE
« on: November 22, 2019, 04:52:36 PM »


               Critique Partner Magic - THE CLOCKS INSIDE
Setting her suitcase on the doorstep, Emmaline swallowed back the pain in her heart. The reward of acceptance into the Time Archers outweighed the risk of stumbling into Henry, one of the young investors in her grandfather's work--and her fianc?. The words 'final task' in her grandfather's letter had her running toward the first train before she'd finished packing.

Emmaline knew Henry hadn't cheated on her, but that didn't erase the memory of Constance pressing her lips against his. Sniffing back the moisture in her eyes, she raised her hand to knock on grandfather's door.
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Inspirations: Pinterest | Final Frontier by Thomas Bergerson


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Re: Critique Partner Magic - THE CLOCKS INSIDE
« Reply #1 on: November 22, 2019, 05:39:32 PM »
Interesting. And yes--I get what you mean!

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Re: Critique Partner Magic - THE CLOCKS INSIDE
« Reply #2 on: November 23, 2019, 03:00:43 PM »
Love the changes and the way we immediately get close to Emmaline and her Time Archer ambitions.

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Re: Critique Partner Magic - THE CLOCKS INSIDE
« Reply #3 on: November 24, 2019, 01:38:57 AM »
I want more please.