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Megan Van Dyke

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The Bone Garden - first draft
« on: November 08, 2019, 08:05:31 PM »
My messy first draft is posted on my blog: http://www.meganrvandyke.com/2019/11/08/writer-in-motion-round-2-the-disaster-first-draft/

Thanks for reading! I appreciate any comments or feedback you have.  :)
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Grim Dreamer

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Re: The Bone Garden - first draft
« Reply #1 on: November 08, 2019, 09:10:14 PM »
The story has a nice, lyric sound. I like the fantasy styling--feels very high fantasy!
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KristenH

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Re: The Bone Garden - first draft
« Reply #2 on: November 09, 2019, 09:47:54 PM »
I love the title Megan and how it gave us a good sense of mystery and fantasy in one great short story. I would love to see what you do with the self-edited version next.
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Re: The Bone Garden - first draft
« Reply #3 on: November 10, 2019, 09:10:36 PM »
I love the title too! I also think for the short story at least, the nameless MC works very well.
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Re: The Bone Garden - first draft
« Reply #4 on: November 12, 2019, 02:26:36 AM »
This story is super cool! I love the moment of doubt toward the end, the moment of terror, and I love the ritual setting.
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JenDavenport

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Re: The Bone Garden - first draft
« Reply #5 on: November 13, 2019, 11:11:44 PM »
I love this! But then again I love all of your work. Can't wait to see where you go with revisions.
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Fariha Khayyam

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Re: The Bone Garden - first draft
« Reply #6 on: November 14, 2019, 04:05:41 PM »
I really like the setting and world where this story takes place!
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Re: The Bone Garden - first draft
« Reply #7 on: November 15, 2019, 02:27:44 AM »
Love the style of writing and the worldbuilding! I especially love the last line.
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