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Thuy

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The Crow on a Birch
« on: November 09, 2019, 01:16:58 AM »
Hi guys! My first draft is up at https://www.tmnstories.com/wim-r2-week1/


For those who don't feel like clicking and just want to read the messy draft, here it is  :)

The Crow on a Birch

I sit stiff in my chair, appraising the trio of good ole boys wearing varying shades of managerial blue button-downs.

?You?ve been such a great asset to this company,? my new boss says, clearing his throat. ?But with the new merger?words can?t express just how sorry we are.? He steeples his fingers, his prickish face drooping with false grief.

Great asset? I?m more than just an asset. I?m the creator of the same goddamn app that launched this company into the greedy sights of WonderCorps acquisitions team.

Fury washes over me, but I don?t give him the satisfaction of losing my cool. I don?t want them to see how much their betrayal hurts me. I stare hard into his eyes, watching him squirm, watching him try to justify docking me after thirty-five years of loyal sweat. I?ve been here from the ground up. But he?s young, and his idea of contribution doesn?t jive with mine.

His eyes brighten with consolation. ?You?ll be pleased with the severance package, I?m sure. It?s quite generous. More than enough to set you up for a nice early retirement.?

I blink once. The gall of these people! Trying to buy out my stakes with a mere pittance. It?s not even about the money. It was never about the money. My boring but rapidly compounding index funds alone can cover me and my orphan heirs at the local Casas de Los Ninos for perpetuity at an annual withdrawal rate of 4%. But I digress. I won?t waste another minute with these smucks.

?It?s been real,? I say. Then I get up and walked out of the office, leaving all three sitting there slack-jawed.

I go to my desk to gather my things, but there?s nothing there worth gathering. Except maybe the miniature bamboo stalk I received from my favorite assistant one Lunar New Year. She too had been let go. I grab it by its China blue vase and exited the drab brown building into the sunshine.

What now? I dread going back to my lonely apartment. To my lone chair at my lone table watching some laugh-tracked re-run with my lone microwave dinner. No, I?m not ready for that. Not when it?s barely even noon.

I stroll past the bus stop, wandering aimlessly, seeing things for the first time. Cars sitting in smoggy traffic. Candy wrappers littering the sidewalks. A hotdog cart inside a lush park I didn?t know existed.

I buy one loaded with extra relish and take it to a nearby bench. Nearby, a shimmering crow caws at me from atop a speckled white birch. I toss a few crumbs in its direction, but a flock of geese quickly swoop in and swipe them away.

The crow retreats and cranes her neck at me from her perch. But she makes no move to compete for the bread. She waits patiently, watching me until I break off a chunk of hotdog and offer it to her from my hand. Only then did she alight to flitter at my side.

Revelation strikes me. Let them act the goose, clambering for crumbs. I?d rather be the crow on a birch, feasting in the end.

I decide I want revenge.

No doubt you?re thinking of the malicious kind where I hijack the firm?s system and turn my code onto itself, eating away its efficiency like Pac-Man on dots. But that isn?t me. I?m not that obvious.

Instead, I envision myself playing a female Andy Dufresne, crawling through five football fields full of shit and coming out clean on the other side. That?s the kind of revenge I want.

It takes me two solid years, but I design a new software suite even more efficient than the last. I know my old code like the back of my hand?all its wonders and all its flaws. I use that to my advantage. I heed client reviews and develop features the old app wouldn?t dream of. In short, I best my own work and then sell it anonymously to WonderCorp?s competitor for half its worth. Yes, I know. I?m petty like that.

It only takes three quarters for WonderCorp?s clients to flip allegiance. Meanwhile, I make weekly visits to the park, feeding the crow and collecting the shiny trinkets she brings me. All while watching the empire I helped build crumble.

But my sadness is fleeting. It?s hard to find sympathy for chauvinist geese. They should know better than to take crumbs meant for the crow. You never know what kind of dynamite hides beneath its wing.

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Re: The Crow on a Birch
« Reply #1 on: November 09, 2019, 02:53:43 AM »
Nice! I like the imagery especially.

KristenH

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Re: The Crow on a Birch
« Reply #2 on: November 09, 2019, 09:51:21 PM »
Great job! I can't wait to see what you do with this story next.

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Re: The Crow on a Birch
« Reply #3 on: November 09, 2019, 10:07:38 PM »
Nice work! Especially love the way you use phrases like ?a lush park I didn?t know was there? to give us an idea of how much she lived for the company. Can?t wait to see the next version.

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Re: The Crow on a Birch
« Reply #4 on: November 11, 2019, 03:27:29 AM »
I love the imagery and the fact you threw in a Shawshank reference.

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Re: The Crow on a Birch
« Reply #5 on: November 11, 2019, 05:55:25 PM »
Amazing job as usual Thuy! I love how neatly you tie up all the ends, and especially the inspiration and imagery of the crow! Way to go.

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Re: The Crow on a Birch
« Reply #6 on: November 14, 2019, 04:11:03 PM »
I'm into anything business-y, enjoyed reading this :D

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Re: The Crow on a Birch
« Reply #7 on: November 15, 2019, 02:49:57 PM »
That was a great story Thuy. Wait a moment while I gush over your use of imagery and metaphor.  It was so good. Looking forward to week 2 to see your edits.