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HM Braverman

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The Way-Station (First Draft)
« on: August 08, 2020, 02:11:29 PM »
https://hmbraverman.com/2020/08/05/writer-in-motion-2020-the-first-draft/

Here?s my first draft. I appreciate any feedback you all have.  :heart:
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SKaeth

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Re: The Way-Station (First Draft)
« Reply #1 on: August 08, 2020, 02:46:25 PM »
I loved this. You really had me worried there with the sniper and the baby!
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Re: The Way-Station (First Draft)
« Reply #2 on: August 08, 2020, 04:43:03 PM »
PLOT TWIST! :D I love it!
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Erin Fulmer

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Re: The Way-Station (First Draft)
« Reply #3 on: August 08, 2020, 05:10:18 PM »
Oooh great twist! I was upset that you wanted me to identify with an assassin targeting a pregnant woman...and then you turned my assumptions upside down. Well done!
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Re: The Way-Station (First Draft)
« Reply #4 on: August 08, 2020, 06:53:24 PM »
This multi-POV story was AWESOME! I love how you depict such a varied range of characters and emotions, all "moving" in the story at the same time
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