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Week 4 posts / Re: Final Draft - THE CLOCKS INSIDE
« on: December 08, 2019, 03:31:17 AM »
Kat, I loved this story! The changes give it a full-circle feeling, like a short story, and I thought the small details were lovely.
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Week 4 posts / Re: Week 4 -- (still) Untitled Witches Final Draft
« on: December 08, 2019, 03:29:05 AM »
OOH. Shivers on that last line.
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Week 4 posts / Re: Final Draft: The Day They Came
« on: December 08, 2019, 03:25:46 AM »
Nice work! You really tightened everything up--looks great!
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Week 4 posts / Re: Grasping the WILD- Draft 4
« on: December 08, 2019, 03:22:28 AM »
I didn't think this could get any better, but it did! Nice work!
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Week 4 posts / Re: Final Draft - The Painter
« on: December 08, 2019, 03:20:53 AM »
Nice revisions, Tyler!
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Week 4 posts / Re: The Crow on a Birch
« on: December 08, 2019, 03:17:43 AM »
Love this newest version. It brings out her character and connects everything from start to finish.
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Week 4 posts / Re: Final Draft / Steph Whitaker
« on: December 08, 2019, 03:11:32 AM »
Really well done! I'd love to see where she goes from here, but even this short piece pulled me in to your MC and kept me interested in her arc.
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Week 4 posts / Re: Space Cows 2: Final Draft
« on: December 08, 2019, 03:06:32 AM »
I love this so much! I want to keep reading about the space cows!
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Week 5 posts / Final Thoughts
« on: December 08, 2019, 02:49:22 AM »
Finally got together my final thoughts...this was an amazing experience, writers.
https://smroffey.wixsite.com/smroffey/single-post/2019/12/07/Writer-In-Motion-Week-5-Final-Thoughts
https://smroffey.wixsite.com/smroffey/single-post/2019/12/07/Writer-In-Motion-Week-5-Final-Thoughts
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Week 4 posts / Re: Sometimes Our Skies: final draft
« on: December 03, 2019, 03:21:12 AM »
The link isn?t working for me. 
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Week 4 posts / Re: Welcome Home - Final Draft
« on: December 03, 2019, 03:19:35 AM »
The pacing is better with your changes?and I love the dark ending (even if it makes me sad!) Nice work. 
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Week 4 posts / Evayolin's Ghosts (Final Draft)
« on: December 02, 2019, 12:10:10 AM »
Finally! I've gotten to my final draft. I'm hoping it's clearer, and better, than the first! LOL. I'm hoping to get to read everyone else's throughout the week!
https://smroffey.wixsite.com/smroffey/single-post/2019/12/01/Writer-In-Motion-Week-4-Evayolins-Ghosts-Final-Draft
https://smroffey.wixsite.com/smroffey/single-post/2019/12/01/Writer-In-Motion-Week-4-Evayolins-Ghosts-Final-Draft
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Week 3 posts / Evayolin?s Ghosts-3rd Draft
« on: November 25, 2019, 03:31:00 AM »
I first want to thank Rebecca Fryar, KJ Harrowick, and Rebecca McWilliams for pulling me out of my comfort zone?in my head. The biggest critique was that the new piece I had added in was quite confusing. Because I like to live in my story, I couldn?t see from the outside?and see that critical information was missing for anyone who hadn?t read some of my other stories. I had to go back through and rip apart the beginning until it made sense!
Here?s the result: https://smroffey.wixsite.com/smroffey/single-post/2019/11/22/Writer-In-Motion-Week-3---Evayolins-Ghost-CP-Round-1
Here?s the result: https://smroffey.wixsite.com/smroffey/single-post/2019/11/22/Writer-In-Motion-Week-3---Evayolins-Ghost-CP-Round-1
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Week 3 posts / Re: For Serenity - 3 Critique Partners Draft
« on: November 23, 2019, 11:01:37 PM »
Wow! I loved this?what wouldn?t we do for our children? This line, though: ?She was uninjured and bleeding to death.? MY HEART. Loved it.