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Week 3 posts / Re: HOME (CP Edit)
« on: August 22, 2020, 04:30:39 PM »
Thuy, this new version is so poetic! I love it.
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Week 3 posts / Re: Kindred: CP revisions (997 words!)
« on: August 22, 2020, 03:27:52 PM »
Aww, I love the ending to this one! I thought for sure the human and the troll were going to change places--so the end was a surprise instead. The changes to the beginning also flowed so nicely!
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Week 3 posts / Week 3 CP Edited Draft - Poisonous Thoughts
« on: August 22, 2020, 03:13:47 PM »
This week I had three amazing critique partners--2 new ones, and my forever CP. As you'll see in my post, I'm pretty intense about my CPs. They're amazing. Thanks to Megan Van Dyke and Steph Whitaker for their questions and comments, which helped me dive deeper into the MC's POV. I even switched to 1st person for a bit to see what that would look like, but after I got comments back from KJ Harrowick I realized I had added a deeper POV but taken away clarity, so it's back to 3rd! Hopefully I've lived up to those incredible CPs and added both depth and clarity.
https://smroffey.com/writer-in-motion-week-3-cp-feedback/
https://smroffey.com/writer-in-motion-week-3-cp-feedback/
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Week 2 posts / Re: Strangers (Draft 2)
« on: August 12, 2020, 12:39:39 PM »
This goes from a really nice sibling story to deliciously gruesome in the blink of an eye. I didn?t expect the twist!!
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Week 2 posts / Re: THE SECRET TO HEAVEN 2nd Draft Self Edits
« on: August 12, 2020, 12:34:02 PM »
This story is only getting better, and it started out so poignant. Love the interwoven past without an info-dump?you really wove it into her emotions.
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Week 2 posts / Re: Ethereal Child -- Second Draft
« on: August 12, 2020, 12:31:15 PM »
This is such an intense scene. It sets up the rest of your story for high tension.
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Week 2 posts / Re: Second Draft: The Witch of Blue Ridge
« on: August 12, 2020, 12:00:29 PM »
Erin, I?m absolutely in love with this version. I love how you?ve really delved into the Witch?s abilities and how ethereal she is.
On a personal note, thank you, Witch of Blue Ridge. <3
On a personal note, thank you, Witch of Blue Ridge. <3
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Week 2 posts / Re: Second draft - Still no title >.<
« on: August 12, 2020, 11:51:09 AM »
I realllly enjoyed the first draft this story, and am loving seeing how the writing gets tighter and the story sharper as we go along. The Speed references are adorable, and I love the ending, too!
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Week 2 posts / Re: Kindred: a self-edit in two-to-three stages >_>
« on: August 11, 2020, 10:11:14 PM »
You may have a bit to cut, but I love the changes you?ve made so far! Nice work!
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Week 2 posts / Re: We Who Paint The Trees - Selfedit Draft
« on: August 11, 2020, 10:07:23 PM »
I am completely in love with this story!
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Week 1 posts / Re: First Draft: Space Goats
« on: August 07, 2020, 12:36:06 PM »
Ha, you did not disappoint, Skaeth!! I love it! G.O.A.T. 
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Week 1 posts / Re: Week 1 Unedited Draft - Poisonous Thoughts
« on: August 07, 2020, 12:29:38 PM »
Thanks, Skaeth! I?m itching to edit!
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Week 1 posts / Re: Week 1 Unedited Draft - Poisonous Thoughts
« on: August 06, 2020, 02:25:21 AM »
Thank you all! I had fun and went in a totally different direction with it than I thought I would. I?ve been reading everyone?s stories as the WriterInMotion account as I post them on the Twitter thread?great stuff!
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Week 1 posts / Re: First Draft: The Witch of Blue Ridge
« on: August 04, 2020, 04:12:54 AM »
So much interiority! And it took a turn I wasn't expecting. Nice work pulling in all the feeling of the setting, too!
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Week 1 posts / Week 1 Unedited Draft - Poisonous Thoughts
« on: August 04, 2020, 04:09:34 AM »
Here's a link to my unedited draft if you're inclined to read it. It's light sci fi.
https://smroffey.com/writer-in-motion-week-1-unedited-first-draft/
https://smroffey.com/writer-in-motion-week-1-unedited-first-draft/