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Week 5 posts / Putting the Tertiaries to Rest - Final Thoughts
« on: September 05, 2020, 08:40:28 AM »
When I first heard about Writer in Motion, I'd misread the signup date as June instead of July and then spent an extra month wondering if I'd have a chance to do it after my mistaken date came and passed, but it only made me more excited at the chance! I love flash fiction, my writing is usually on the short side anyway and that came through in the fact that I never hit 1k in the entire Writer in Motion process and yet, it kind of worked to my advantage now.
I went rather silly with my piece, the character rebelling against the creator as a conduit for me rebelling against the prompt. I'd had doubts about it throughout, of whether it was too meta to be interesting and how it would look next to the other more thought-out pieces, but the responses I got were laughter and understanding, taking me completely by surprise!
I'm very grateful to my CPs and editor, who all gave me something to think about with this piece, where to buff it up and where it actually works as it is and where they realized just what was going on. I realized I need to work on wrangling my own characters and fighting through that writing block to stay in the perspective, or else Jesse just might get me; is learning that too meta too? I don't know anymore.
I went rather silly with my piece, the character rebelling against the creator as a conduit for me rebelling against the prompt. I'd had doubts about it throughout, of whether it was too meta to be interesting and how it would look next to the other more thought-out pieces, but the responses I got were laughter and understanding, taking me completely by surprise!
I'm very grateful to my CPs and editor, who all gave me something to think about with this piece, where to buff it up and where it actually works as it is and where they realized just what was going on. I realized I need to work on wrangling my own characters and fighting through that writing block to stay in the perspective, or else Jesse just might get me; is learning that too meta too? I don't know anymore.
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Week 4 posts / Putting the Tertiaries to Rest [FOURTH DRAFT]
« on: August 25, 2020, 08:55:33 PM »
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ko98pEv-X2hPsMcoBvFytiz4NlyOZbiG8U4czUvAAlM/edit
I'm very grateful to Justine Manzano for catching my commas! I struggle with placement sometimes (I've recently wondered if it's because of a habit from another language, but I guess I'll never know for sure), and having an experienced eye look over it makes a huge difference in knowing that even the small details are reviewed.
There wasn't much else to change between Draft 3 and 4 though so that's all I've got for this week!
I'm very grateful to Justine Manzano for catching my commas! I struggle with placement sometimes (I've recently wondered if it's because of a habit from another language, but I guess I'll never know for sure), and having an experienced eye look over it makes a huge difference in knowing that even the small details are reviewed.
There wasn't much else to change between Draft 3 and 4 though so that's all I've got for this week!
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Week 3 posts / Putting the Tertiaries to Rest [THIRD DRAFT]
« on: August 20, 2020, 12:16:45 PM »
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1zNBsoGuBNZrki13MQqyF5YusVOKIgd8rXZ1CaEbIP8k/edit?usp=sharing
I took my two CPs' feedback and tried to incorporate it; one of them suggested more description of Jesse so she's now a brawny lass with some sucker-punched (pun intended) armor
Although this was not a suggested edit, I also changed the octopus to a squid because even if it's a small detail, in my honestly not humble opinion on this particular topic, squids need all the love.
I reordered and reworded some of the dialogue to hopefully flow better. The biggest shame edit I had was that I misspelled a sailing term for a maneuver I've actually done before! But oh well, as one of the CPs said, it was the typo imp
I took my two CPs' feedback and tried to incorporate it; one of them suggested more description of Jesse so she's now a brawny lass with some sucker-punched (pun intended) armor
Although this was not a suggested edit, I also changed the octopus to a squid because even if it's a small detail, in my honestly not humble opinion on this particular topic, squids need all the love. I reordered and reworded some of the dialogue to hopefully flow better. The biggest shame edit I had was that I misspelled a sailing term for a maneuver I've actually done before! But oh well, as one of the CPs said, it was the typo imp
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Week 2 posts / Putting the Tertiaries to Rest [SECOND DRAFT]
« on: August 15, 2020, 12:35:38 PM »
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1vw30jdQz62jL90-dir-El96Mr8DO9AeIr97PJIe9jC8/edit
Got my second draft edited! My process for editing isn't very involved, I tend to write very much like a spelunker exploring a cave and my first drafts are rather meandering as I'm discovering where I want to go with the piece, so editing is simply going back and taking a more direct route.
In the first draft, I think I crammed a lot of ideas in there at once that kind of ended up sticking out all over the place. I waffled back and forth between the author having forgotten things about Jesse but then simultaneously knowing everything about her. There was also the idea that Jesse wasn't the first, or last, character that needed to be killed and so was just a chore to be ticked off in the author's duties. The author was already unsure how the story was supposed to go in their rewrite, or maybe they'd just forgotten their original ideas, I was unclear on that myself, ironically In that version the author was discovering things as they talked to Jesse and the reason for her turning on them was sudden too.
So I tried to fix some of those things and focus on Jesse's rightful indignation at being sidelined, and also killed. Making it more about the process of the author slipping up and Jesse finding out that they're not infallible and so, true to her hero nature, seeing them as a final boss that she has to take on in order to get the control she wants. I changed the author's intentions to be in the process of revision, thereby representing a bigger threat to Jesse and giving her more reason to be angry, and this hopefully gave it a more streamlined concept and made some things clearer. I guess we'll see if it's improvement or not
Oh, and true to form, Jesse's now queer. Because why not. Honestly, that just slipped in there while I was trying to rework the dialogue but I guess I can't stop myself even unconsciously.
Got my second draft edited! My process for editing isn't very involved, I tend to write very much like a spelunker exploring a cave and my first drafts are rather meandering as I'm discovering where I want to go with the piece, so editing is simply going back and taking a more direct route.
In the first draft, I think I crammed a lot of ideas in there at once that kind of ended up sticking out all over the place. I waffled back and forth between the author having forgotten things about Jesse but then simultaneously knowing everything about her. There was also the idea that Jesse wasn't the first, or last, character that needed to be killed and so was just a chore to be ticked off in the author's duties. The author was already unsure how the story was supposed to go in their rewrite, or maybe they'd just forgotten their original ideas, I was unclear on that myself, ironically
In that version the author was discovering things as they talked to Jesse and the reason for her turning on them was sudden too. So I tried to fix some of those things and focus on Jesse's rightful indignation at being sidelined, and also killed. Making it more about the process of the author slipping up and Jesse finding out that they're not infallible and so, true to her hero nature, seeing them as a final boss that she has to take on in order to get the control she wants. I changed the author's intentions to be in the process of revision, thereby representing a bigger threat to Jesse and giving her more reason to be angry, and this hopefully gave it a more streamlined concept and made some things clearer. I guess we'll see if it's improvement or not
Oh, and true to form, Jesse's now queer. Because why not. Honestly, that just slipped in there while I was trying to rework the dialogue but I guess I can't stop myself even unconsciously.
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Week 1 posts / First Draft: Putting the Tertiaries to Rest
« on: August 07, 2020, 09:28:25 PM »
First draft (775 words)
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-ryFUcMuqLVk3kkI-Me4_o6pb03y9HR17cpPx8AApdk/edit
I don't have the patience or energy to deal with how to format punctuation into these posts properly so google docs is what I'm going with
I didn't feel too inspired by the prompt so I decided to play around instead. I've never written anything in second-person before and I've read a few interesting stories in the past that use it to good effect, and it felt like it fit with the meta idea I had ended up wanting to write, plus it gave me the new angle I wanted on the story. I'd originally thought of just using first-person, but I felt like it had more use at the end instead.
Normally characters don't bother talking to me because I talk for them and that's not how I conceptualize characters in the first place, but it amused me to think of how one of them might be dissatisfied with my ideas and decide to take matters into their own hands. Or head.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-ryFUcMuqLVk3kkI-Me4_o6pb03y9HR17cpPx8AApdk/edit
I don't have the patience or energy to deal with how to format punctuation into these posts properly so google docs is what I'm going with
I didn't feel too inspired by the prompt so I decided to play around instead. I've never written anything in second-person before and I've read a few interesting stories in the past that use it to good effect, and it felt like it fit with the meta idea I had ended up wanting to write, plus it gave me the new angle I wanted on the story. I'd originally thought of just using first-person, but I felt like it had more use at the end instead.
Normally characters don't bother talking to me because I talk for them and that's not how I conceptualize characters in the first place, but it amused me to think of how one of them might be dissatisfied with my ideas and decide to take matters into their own hands. Or head.
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Week 0 posts / First timer with first impressions
« on: August 05, 2020, 09:16:18 PM »
I didn't expect the prompt to, well, not prompt any ideas! The hills looked like average background hills to me and coupled with the house: I wasn't feeling whelmed. And that in itself gave me an idea, what position could I put a character in where they are not feeling whelmed with their surroundings? They were expecting something and what they got wasn't what they thought they would get...
Well, it's time to meet your maker. Here I come.
Well, it's time to meet your maker. Here I come.
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