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dankoboldt

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The Watcher in the Vale - second draft
« on: August 13, 2020, 01:32:40 PM »
I must say, friends, that this Writer in Motion thing is a lot of fun. I've completed my self-edits, whittled the story down to below 1,000 words, and posted the thing on my blog:

http://dankoboldt.com/writer-in-motion-second-draft/

I'd love your comments, either here or there!

(All comments on my blog are moderated, so if you haven't left one before it may take an hour or two for me to approve it).

Dan Koboldt
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Creator of THE TRIANGLE, a sci-fi adventure series (Serial Box, April 2019)
Editor of Putting the Science in Fiction (Writer's Digest, October 2018)
Author of Gateways to Alissia (Harper Voyager 2016-2018)

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Re: The Watcher in the Vale - second draft
« Reply #1 on: August 14, 2020, 04:21:34 AM »
Loving this story, Dan! Fascinating premise and obviously very polished, professional writing. The ending made me wonder if soldiers from both/all sides of the conflict were coming to the oracle.