For Serenity - 3 Critique Partners Draft

[jlburrowsauthor]

I LOVE the critique partner round! The more that I work with CPs the less I believe anyone should ever put words out in the world without at least two CPs touching it.

This round was so easy for me! I was emotionally attached to two parts, but I slashed them, trusting my CPs. I LOVE THIS VERSION! It's only problem is that it is 126 words too long. So, this next week I'm working with my CP to pare it down. Fingers crossed!

You can read it on my blog at https://www.jlburrows.com/2019/11/21/for-serenity-2/

To those of you that left me a comment on my last draft, YOU MADE MY WEEK! Thank you so much! I always love those!
Jennifer

[Grim Dreamer]

Good job!

[songmaiden]

Wow! I loved this?what wouldn?t we do for our children? This line, though: ?She was uninjured and bleeding to death.? MY HEART. Loved it.

[jlburrowsauthor]

Thank you both for your encouragement!

Jennifer