Homecoming self-edit (draft 2)

[kassamarandra]

Here's the link to my Week 2 self-edit of my flash piece Homecoming.
Thank you to all the previous commenters. I appreciate the encouragement! I hope to pay it back this round.

https://www.cmfick.com/post/writer-in-motion-week-2

[Fabierien]

I enjoyed this story and the presumed good ending. I liked the changes you made to the opening, the story felt personal. It is interesting that both you and I had a similar take on the prompt. I was even going to call mine Homecoming till I saw your title in week one. lol.