Woman in the Shack (1st Draft)

[ShaynaGrissom]

https://shaynamightbeanauthor.blogspot.com/2020/08/writer-in-motion-short-story-woman-in.html

[BErixson]

Oh wow. I like how voicey the opening is... and was not expecting that ending.

[Helena]

Lots of twists in this story. You don't know where it's going until you get to the brutal ending which totally caught me off guard.

[Vickywrites]

Wow, that ending packed a punch! I knew something was coming from the great build up, but wasnt expecting that!

[SKaeth]

What a powerful evocative end! I really did not expect that and now I have so many questions! Really well done first draft!

[dankoboldt]

The opening felt so deeply personal and real. You showed us the tip of so many backstory icebergs. There was, admittedly, a moment where I thought the lady in the shack was the mom, because they'd just been talking about her. Obviously I figured it out when they called her hot :-).

Wow, that ending! My mouth literally fell open.

[Erin Fulmer]

I realized I read this and even linked to it in my blog, but missed commenting on it! I love the dark creepiness here and the reveal/twist. I'm curious what happens with the character's brother at the end. Can't wait to see it develop!