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Kimberly B.

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First Draft -- Exiled
« on: August 07, 2020, 08:05:12 PM »
You can find my super rough, unedited first draft of my story Exiled on my website here:
https://kimberlybea.com/2020/08/07/writer-in-motion-week-1/

Helena

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Re: First Draft -- Exiled
« Reply #1 on: August 07, 2020, 08:39:54 PM »
Absolutely delightful!

Dani Frank

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Re: First Draft -- Exiled
« Reply #2 on: August 07, 2020, 10:09:19 PM »
Ooh the last sentence! So suspenseful. There's so much world building in this.

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Re: First Draft -- Exiled
« Reply #3 on: August 08, 2020, 12:45:04 AM »
The voice here is absolutely gorgeous, and that last sentence! I want to know what happens next!

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Re: First Draft -- Exiled
« Reply #4 on: August 08, 2020, 12:20:41 PM »
Oooo I really loved this, it's very fairy tale like, and I hope she gets out and free!