Self-Edited: The Crow on a Birch

[Thuy]

Finally got my self-edits in this week! https://www.tmnstories.com/wim-round-2-week-2-the-self-edited-draft/

Working in a little characterization for my MC tore up my first draft quite a bit  Hopefully, it's for the better. Thanks for reading!

[natlockettwrites]

Unrelated to the story: Love how crisp and clean your website is!

I really liked getting to see your process and I definitely felt like the workplace affair angle made her a more sympathetic (but also badass) character. The parallels/epiphany with the crow vs. geese is really cool too--I like that it gives color to her drive for revenge.

[Fabierien]

My golly, I thought the 1st one was good at the core but you painted such a wonderful picture through now. The affair angle really brought the character to life. It gave her a real motivation that she was lacking. So good!



R. Pelham Hern
@Steelforgedgame

[Grim Dreamer]

I might be the only one, but I was a little more attracted to the first draft character! But I like my ladies badass, going for everything they know is theirs, regardless of whether it's a lot or a little, and for whatever reason means the most to them personally. But it all comes down to what your vision is. I like this one, too!