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K. J. Harrowick

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THE CLOCKS INSIDE - A Self-Edited Draft
« on: November 16, 2019, 03:23:28 PM »


               The Clocks Inside - A Self-Edited Draft
Emmaline knew Henry didn't cheat on her, but she couldn't erase the memory of Constance pressing her lips against his. Setting her suitcase on the doorstep, she swallowed back the pain and adjusted the Time Archers pin on her lapel, a bow and arrow spearing a clock.

Rusted iron wove elegant designs over the oak door, numbers burned into the wood changing with each second. According to her grandfather, the only clock in the universe to keep true time across every world, but a knock wasn't necessary. As soon as her knuckles hovered against the weathered wood, grandfather opened. 
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Inspirations: Pinterest | Final Frontier by Thomas Bergerson


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Re: THE CLOCKS INSIDE - A Self-Edited Draft
« Reply #1 on: November 16, 2019, 08:25:34 PM »
I was excited to see which path you'd choose from last week and got a fun surprise to find this new twist! I definitely like this third option best, especially with Constance in the globe world, spiking up the tension. Nice work!

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Re: THE CLOCKS INSIDE - A Self-Edited Draft
« Reply #2 on: November 16, 2019, 09:56:21 PM »
It's looking good! Lots going on, and plenty of interesting things happening at the end.  :taco: :taco: :taco: :taco: