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ShaynaGrissom

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Re: Woman in the Shack (1st Draft)
« Reply #1 on: August 03, 2020, 04:36:03 PM »
Oh wow. I like how voicey the opening is... and was not expecting that ending.

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Re: Woman in the Shack (1st Draft)
« Reply #2 on: August 04, 2020, 07:27:39 AM »
Lots of twists in this story. You don't know where it's going until you get to the brutal ending which totally caught me off guard.

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Re: Woman in the Shack (1st Draft)
« Reply #3 on: August 04, 2020, 07:24:43 PM »
Wow, that ending packed a punch! I knew something was coming from the great build up, but wasnt expecting that!

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Re: Woman in the Shack (1st Draft)
« Reply #4 on: August 06, 2020, 01:51:46 AM »
What a powerful evocative end! I really did not expect that and now I have so many questions! Really well done first draft!

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Re: Woman in the Shack (1st Draft)
« Reply #5 on: August 06, 2020, 01:57:49 PM »
The opening felt so deeply personal and real. You showed us the tip of so many backstory icebergs. There was, admittedly, a moment where I thought the lady in the shack was the mom, because they'd just been talking about her. Obviously I figured it out when they called her hot :-).

Wow, that ending! My mouth literally fell open.
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Re: Woman in the Shack (1st Draft)
« Reply #6 on: August 07, 2020, 06:00:35 PM »
I realized I read this and even linked to it in my blog, but missed commenting on it! I love the dark creepiness here and the reveal/twist. I'm curious what happens with the character's brother at the end. Can't wait to see it develop!