Untitled: First Draft

[lsisler]

Here is my first draft, still untitled.

[BErixson]

Hello! Of course I'm the first reply on yours. I can see how you made the connection to the house and the beach house. I can also see where you've pulled in elements of the unknown and anticipation from the image.

Looking forward to the next draft.

Keep writing.

[lsisler]

For the next round of self-edits I need to tighten up the language and perhaps provide a bit more connective tissue throughout.
Thanks for reading!

[Vickywrites]

Hello, I can see the connection between the mountain & the beach houses too. I enjoyed the memoir-esq feel and the musical references, music is so evocative. Looking forward to reading the next draft!

[lsisler]

Thanks, Vicky, for the words of encouragement. I am looking forward to the next draft as well.

[Erin Fulmer]

Love that first line and the way you brought it back in the last line.