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dankoboldt

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First Draft: The Watcher in the Vale
« on: August 06, 2020, 01:13:46 PM »
Hello, WIM friends! I've completed my first draft of a science fiction story I'm calling "The Watcher in the Vale" and posted it on my blog here:

http://dankoboldt.com/wim-week-1-first-draft/

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Dan Koboldt
dankoboldt (at) gmail [dot] com
Creator of THE TRIANGLE, a sci-fi adventure series (Serial Box, April 2019)
Editor of Putting the Science in Fiction (Writer's Digest, October 2018)
Author of Gateways to Alissia (Harper Voyager 2016-2018)

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Re: First Draft: The Watcher in the Vale
« Reply #1 on: August 06, 2020, 05:46:59 PM »
Astonishingly well written. Amazing what you were able to do with so few words and how your story covered every element.
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Re: First Draft: The Watcher in the Vale
« Reply #2 on: August 07, 2020, 03:23:40 PM »
As I said in my tweet, this is a great first draft! I love how you mashed up SF and F and could lean either way or continue to keep them mixed! Looking forward to seeing how it changes through edits!
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Re: First Draft: The Watcher in the Vale
« Reply #3 on: August 07, 2020, 03:59:11 PM »
A great premise and so well-written! I look forward to seeing how it develops!
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Re: First Draft: The Watcher in the Vale
« Reply #4 on: August 07, 2020, 04:28:02 PM »
Nicely done.  :)
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Re: First Draft: The Watcher in the Vale
« Reply #5 on: August 07, 2020, 06:23:19 PM »
Absolutely gorgeous work, Dan. I was riveted from the opening line all the way to the end.

You moved the story along brilliantly and the end was such a satisfying arc, and yet I'm dying to know more about this man, this universe, and why that object exists in the first place.  :heart:
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