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Jeffrey Ricker

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First Draft: Exile
« on: August 08, 2020, 11:47:34 PM »
Whew! I signed up late and didn't get started writing until Thursday, so this is a) very rough and b) very much over length and c) very late. But, it's done.

https://jeffrey-ricker.com/writer-in-motion-week-1-exile/

Now I can't wait to check out other folks' work.
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Re: First Draft: Exile
« Reply #1 on: August 09, 2020, 04:15:00 PM »
This was great! I love how you wove in their past into the events, and I'm interested to see what you choose to cut!

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Re: First Draft: Exile
« Reply #2 on: August 09, 2020, 09:01:56 PM »
This was great! I love how you wove in their past into the events, and I'm interested to see what you choose to cut!

Thanks! That's the tricky part.  :-\ However, it helps that I almost always over-write and can tighten things up a lot. So glad you enjoyed it!
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Detours (Contemporary LGBT)

K. J. Harrowick

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Re: First Draft: Exile
« Reply #3 on: August 13, 2020, 02:08:55 PM »
Love this! B definitely makes me think of Johnny 5.  ;D

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Re: First Draft: Exile
« Reply #4 on: August 14, 2020, 02:56:48 AM »
I enjoyed this so much. Great characters and conflict with a really interesting backstory. Love the caretaking bot. Glad you're joining us!