Week 2: Second Draft of Sulphur & Smoke

[Meredith Crosbie]

I've made a few changes to the beginning of my story, and tried to tighten up the prose throughout. Here are the new first lines:

Living in a big city means you see all kinds of strange things. And me, well, I?ve seen and done even stranger things in my several lifetimes. But when this man stopped in front of me and smiled, it set my teeth on edge.

https://northseawriter.wordpress.com/2021/07/23/writer-in-motion-week-2-sulphur-and-smoke/

[songmaiden]

this gave me “Invisible Life of Addie Larue” vibes!!