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kassamarandra

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HOMECOMING first draft CM Fick
« on: November 07, 2019, 07:09:48 PM »
My first draft can be found on the week 1 blog post here:
https://www.cmfick.com/post/writer-in-motion-week-1

songmaiden

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Re: HOMECOMING first draft CM Fick
« Reply #1 on: November 07, 2019, 08:23:42 PM »
Love the excitement when the helicopter?s coming, and the tidbits of backstory (like the woman who hasn?t seen her husband since before her baby was born.)

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Re: HOMECOMING first draft CM Fick
« Reply #2 on: November 07, 2019, 10:12:38 PM »
I like it. Good interior tension and material to work with in there.

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Re: HOMECOMING first draft CM Fick
« Reply #3 on: November 09, 2019, 02:09:51 AM »
Beautiful piece, Cas! I love the intensity of a long-awaited reunion.  :heart:

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Re: HOMECOMING first draft CM Fick
« Reply #4 on: November 09, 2019, 11:54:48 PM »
I loved it, CM. Great storytelling to fit with the prompted theme. I can't wait to see how you edit it to its finer glory next week.

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Re: HOMECOMING first draft CM Fick
« Reply #5 on: November 10, 2019, 03:48:27 AM »
It's cool. I can post my support without reading your story. Sure. No problem. I've got this.  8) ;D

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Re: HOMECOMING first draft CM Fick
« Reply #6 on: November 12, 2019, 02:14:47 AM »
Ooh, nice job! I enjoyed the numbness to hope, crescendoing to the end. Great job dropping in bits of backstory, too.