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Kristin Record

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The Drowning Game - First Draft
« on: November 07, 2019, 08:20:38 PM »
The Drowning Game by Kristin Record

You can find my first draft here : https://wickedrambling.wordpress.com/2019/11/07/writer-in-motion-week-1-first-draft-the-drowning-game/

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Re: The Drowning Game - First Draft
« Reply #1 on: November 07, 2019, 10:09:13 PM »
Nice first draft! Clear problem, difficult solution, and good external tension.

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Re: The Drowning Game - First Draft
« Reply #2 on: November 10, 2019, 03:42:51 AM »
I wanna read it but don't want to get an pre-conceived ideas before I edit it.  :'(

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Re: The Drowning Game - First Draft
« Reply #3 on: November 10, 2019, 08:21:02 PM »
What a beautiful and emotional piece! The inspiration from your own personal grief shows in your lovely writing, and the ending gave me all the feels :heart:

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Re: The Drowning Game - First Draft
« Reply #4 on: November 11, 2019, 12:00:35 AM »
Wicked, what a great first draft to capture a party scene with family. Thanks for sharing this memorable piece  in honor of your loss.

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Re: The Drowning Game - First Draft
« Reply #5 on: November 12, 2019, 02:30:10 AM »
So sorry for your loss. This piece is so powerful, crashing with emotion. It's a really nice draft!