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I really like this. The dialogue is natural and really moves the story forward.
I love the line "Crouched on the roof of the ugly mountainside building, Malthas stretched his leathery wings towards the star-filled sky and studied his new bride." It really orients the reader to the characters and the setting.

Looking forward to reading the next draft.

When Beck sent me a message asking to join this challenge my initial thought was "no." I've been taking grad classes all summer and these last 5 weeks was my vacation from that. I initially wanted to just take it easy and not write for the rest of the summer.  But, I looked at the prompt and thought, "I could write something for this." And Beck's enthusiasm kinda got to me so I decided "why not?"

When I looked at the picture I focused on the house-- and ignored the surrounding mountain. The first thought that came to mind looking at the house was a small beach bungalow I rented last summer. And since I write memoir I figured I could write about my time there last summer. As I wrote the first draft I added another "beach scene" to try to form a more linear narrative. 

When I went back to look at the prompt again, I saw that it was a mountain house and thought maybe I messed up the prompt from the get-go, but I decided that I'll stick with what I have and see how it turns out.

For the next round of self-edits I need to tighten up the language and perhaps provide a bit more connective tissue throughout.
Thanks for reading!