Author Topic: The Drowning Game - First Draft (Read 2550 times)

Kristin Record · « **on:** November 07, 2019, 08:20:38 PM »

Grim Dreamer · « **Reply #1 on:** November 07, 2019, 10:09:13 PM »

Nice first draft! Clear problem, difficult solution, and good external tension.

Jeni Chappelle · « **Reply #2 on:** November 10, 2019, 03:42:51 AM »

I wanna read it but don't want to get an pre-conceived ideas before I edit it.

Thuy · « **Reply #3 on:** November 10, 2019, 08:21:02 PM »

What a beautiful and emotional piece! The inspiration from your own personal grief shows in your lovely writing, and the ending gave me all the feels

KristenH · « **Reply #4 on:** November 11, 2019, 12:00:35 AM »

Wicked, what a great first draft to capture a party scene with family. Thanks for sharing this memorable piece in honor of your loss.

SKaeth · « **Reply #5 on:** November 12, 2019, 02:30:10 AM »

So sorry for your loss. This piece is so powerful, crashing with emotion. It's a really nice draft!

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